Monday, 25 August 2014

Monument hill



WALT: Create a piece of writing that inspires your reader to visit a place you love to go.

6 comments:

  1. You make good observations about how things look smaller from the top. If you use your skills in varying sentence structure you could make your writing less repetitive for your reader. You could also expand on each idea and paint a move vivid picture of each thing you see using lots of language features.

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  2. Dayna@kaikohewest24 October 2014 at 10:52

    Hi Jesse I like your work I wish that I could go the some time. Jesse you should add more slides because it it to short.

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  3. Hi Jesse I really love your work your been doing lately I think it looks so awesome Jesse you should add more slides because its to short

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